David is pleasingly specific in presenting his reasons for transferring.
David is pleasingly specific in presenting his reasons for transferring.David knows exactly what he wants to study, and he has a clear understanding of what both Penn and Amherst have to offer him.I met interesting people from around the world, worked with amazing students and faculty from Hebrew University, and became fascinated with the current efforts to create a portrait of life in the Canaanite period.
Many transfer applicants are trying to move to a new college because they are running away from some kind of bad experience, sometimes something academic, sometimes something more personal. He does have a lot more space left to elaborate, but in this case the letter gets the job done well with few words.
David, however, clearly likes Amherst and is running towards something—an opportunity at Penn that better matches his newly discovered professional goals. The Common Transfer Application instructions state that the essay needs to be at least 250 words. David gets the tone perfect, something that is difficult to do in a transfer essay.
His letter will need to be extremely strong for his transfer application to be successful.
During the summer after my first year of college, I spent six weeks volunteering at an archaeological excavation in Hazor, site of the largest tel (mound) in Israel.
By attending Penn, I hope to broaden and deepen my knowledge in anthropology, participate in more summer field work, volunteer at the museum, and eventually, go on to graduate school in archaeology.
My reasons for transferring are almost entirely academic.
The following sample essay was written by a student named David.
He wrote the transfer essay below for the Common Transfer Application in response to the prompt, "Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve" (250 to 650 words).
My time in Hazor was not easy—wake-up came at a.m., and by noontime temperatures were often in the 90s. I wore out two pairs of gloves and the knees in several pairs of khakis.
Nevertheless, I loved every minute of my time in Israel.